Points Whore

Bill, you make good points but not as a whore. You could, of course, lie back, then grin and bare it (pun intended) as you think of England. Or the good old USA. Either way, here's ten points to help you along the way in your new career - if that's the one you're determined to follow.

Nice interesting poem. I'm still mulling it over. How many points do you have?

William, I`m greatful for your art and your opinions. This is adorable, you have so much talent. May I suggest some red pumps? lol

It IS possible to have more than one facet to your personality. You do write serious poems as well as the fun stories and comments.

I'm sorry you don't get the serious critique you are desiring. Are there other sites available that WOULD offer that? You could write in both places.

I like it very much. A little touch of whimsy like a hankie to dry your tears and perhaps to dab at the makeup if it runs.

I didn't see any need for punctuation as your arrangement breaks the poem into phrasing quite clearly. If Don Marquis could elect to dispense with capitals surely you can choose not to use punctuation.

You know William, I am going to say this is a great poem, and I mean a great poem because it is. Not because of how it reads or sounds, but because of what it says, and it says it just out there, without any of us having to drive ourselves nuts to interpret it. I think that is what a good poem does. I read a lot of poetry on here, and don't comment, sometimes because the poet or writer as the case may be, is using words, that in my opinion, don't belong in a poem. I believe poetry, and most of the great poets in the world knew that, are meant to be read and understood and then remembered and long after quoted. I think the people you are worried about here are not worth suffering about. Perhaps we, who read you on a daily basis, are not elete, but we are the public, and who else are you writing for? I think you should use any style you want to, punctuation, none, caps, or not, doesn't matter as long as what you write is for the masses. The most wonderful poem in the world, to its' writer, that is only understood by him, will never be one remembered. I remember reading a lot of poetry in my youth by the great poets of the past and can still remember them to say many if not all the lines of them. I couldn't do that if they were artsy, They wouldn't stick in my mind and heart. I know people may think I don't know what I am talking about, because I am just a simple person that likes to write poetry from the heart, no matter what the subject, but I am a well read person, and educated to some degree, and have a command of the English language and if I wanted to walk around with a dictionary stuck up you know where, I could understand what some of the artsy folk are saying. I say to you my firend, William, don't leave us, we love you, but go to other sites if you think you will be appreciated. I know why I am read, I belong to about 25 poet groups on here, so some one comments on my stuff every day. Friends is what this place is all about. Go to Ernie, he has some good places to show your stuff, and you will be accepted and well read. Sorry you are feeling let down here, but me and my dandelions love you.

Ernie mentioned another site for publishing poetry, but I'm not sure how it worked out. But Wilma's right; it's good you have a multi-faceted personality. Dare I say this poem is kind of multi-faceted too? (Steven King had some similar comments about artsy words.) I smiled reading it. Meanwhile I should go look at my points sometime - I spend enough in bookstores I need any help I can get.

Just want to thank you for your comments - I've learned from some, as you can maybe tell, quietly agreed with others, and thoroughly enjoyed the chocolate ants and dandelion wine. I enjoy your friendship - thanks.

William my dear friend, I am at a loss for words; and that doesn't
happen to often. I think Elsie said it all up right for you. Just Know
I wish the best for whatever you decide.

Elsie did say it all in great fashion. Good luck to you on the route you take.

Movement


We the disintegraters heaved our maps across
America, the troughs and valleys brain-like.
Road kill informs us. And the trolleys
run social societies. Hunger bears most
of the movement. So what can we do but go
to the carnival, spinning under a moving sky
and buy a heartbeat on a stick. And watch.

Good one because it says much and each one of the readers may interpret in a different way.
Thank you

Thanks to everyone for your kindness and a special thanks to Elsie for her wisdom.
Karen, On the surface your deep philosophy is humorous. If you are thinking of being a philosopher, you had better read Magi's short stories first.
I'm thinking of a new humor roasting article and Barbara B is in my headlights.

Bill, listen to Elsie. She is spot on!

I hope I am never what you described here:

Like any lemming with comments nice
Hiding their ignorance like a vice


I do try to read as much as I can on Gather and leave comments when I have something to say. But in my travels thru Gatherland, I often hear the same refrain regarding the dearth of responses to articles posted.

I am starting to believe that the membership numbers are as inflated as some have proposed. With averages to consider, an article is being read less than anticipated because the numbers just aren't there to support the need for readers and comments.

Anyway, I hope you will continue to post your articles and if you get points for them, the better!

Oh William, hear me roar, lol

Well Bill you got your full share of comments. Enough to make you feel part of a family that loves you.
Please go yo my MYCHEC article and notice you namw there as part of the new team...and the begin date of 15 July.
Now just to make you feel really at home, I going to say a few things which you may cock a snoot at...but I mean it well and you always ask for crits.
Your first line has a typo "til".
I've the vague idea that you wanted to make the first two lines rhyme. You nearly achieved this but not quite. With a little bit of effort you could easily do it very well.
Your admiring and interested friend Fred

Bravo William! This is an excellent write. Very creative and imaginative. Well penned my friend...Hugz...Jillian

Ok, William. I am really slow when it comes to most poetry. I do not really get a lot of it. But to me poetry is an expression of the heart. And if someone relates to your expressions, then great. I can also say that between you and Elsie, I have found poetry that is approachable and interesting and incredibly enjoyable. So thank you William and Elsie for reawakening in me an admiration for this art form.

Oh yeah, LOVE the poem!

Love this poem!

Since you haven't posted anything yet today, I dug up this old gem of yours. I wish I could think of something original and helpful to say to you on all of your writings; you are always so helpful on mine but I do not feel qualified to critique a writer like you. You are one of the writers whom I greatly admire here.

I have learned a lot from your writing and your critiques. I sincerely wish that I was capable of teaching you something too.

Nice poem William

Very cute poem. Hope you are feeling better every day.