by Terry Collett
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November 1, 2006

DEATH WRAPPED.

June 28, 2007 02:01 AM EDT (Updated: August 20, 2008 03:06 PM EDT)
views: 42 | comments: 15

She took the child wrapped in death,
And held her close in her mothering arms
And kissed the brow with her tired lips.

Still now; no movement or crease;
No release of smile or wind;
No uttered cry or whinge of pain.

The baby sagged
Like drowned kittens in a sack,
All flesh, bones, and dying muck
Wrapped in a white shroud like gown.

No quizzical gaze or frown
Just the slow still minutes ticking by
And an empty gulf of grief digging deep.
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Comments: 15

HEIDI F. Jun 28, 2007, 3:14am EDT
thanks for the poem.
John Doyle Jun 28, 2007, 7:02am EDT
Good imaging sad poem
Luik Rossi Jun 28, 2007, 7:48am EDT
yes... filled with a empty gulf of grief digging deep.

rare species
Virginia M. Jun 28, 2007, 8:31am EDT
Powerful. Sad. Very well written..
Edward Nudelman Jun 28, 2007, 2:36pm EDT
I like this sad, evocative poem, Terry. The only small suggestion I'd have would be to think about the simile: "The baby sagged/ Like drowned kittens in a sack," and perhaps come up with a more appropriate comparison. This one seemed to me to be a little pressed. Other than that, quite a powerful poem, indeed.
Shelbia C. Aug 4, 2008, 3:51am EDT
Very powerful imagery. Sad subject.
Angela A. Aug 20, 2008, 3:59pm EDT
That's terrible! I hope to never experience that type of grief.
Holly Jahangiri Aug 20, 2008, 4:50pm EDT
I can only echo the sentiments already posted. You convey the sense of loss and emptiness well. I agree with Edward - the kittens don't work for me, either. ;) Other than that... a fine poem.
Carol P. Aug 20, 2008, 5:52pm EDT
Powerful to say the least. Very touching Terry.
L. H. Aug 20, 2008, 7:56pm EDT
Terry sometimes, your just too much for me, it's almost "savage".
db10 of course.
Carl Prime Time Lee Aug 20, 2008, 9:47pm EDT
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Sharon B. Aug 20, 2008, 11:45pm EDT
thanks for the poem
Kimber F. Aug 21, 2008, 5:08am EDT
I am going to agree with the others who said that the kitten analogy didn't work for me. But the poem was a very powerful one and you convey the emotion very well. Thank you so much for sharing it with us and peace.
Lewis (taking over Gather) K. Aug 28, 2008, 9:22pm EDT
Genuinely haunting.

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