by Magi the magical poet is riding the wind again
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March 29, 2006

The Fallen Face

May 04, 2007 06:49 AM EDT
views: 61 | rating: 9.9/10 (19 votes) | comments: 42

In the Mirror Darkly 01 of 05

 

 The Fallen Face

 

 

I fell with

            the tear drops

from your eyes

            my darling child

when your world

            once so bright

with trusted doll

            and teddy bear

plunged into ruins

            where nothing said

would bring happiness

            back and only

missing face could

            do just that

beside the cold

            divorce court gate

 

 

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 000 Poetry of the Heart - Table of Contents (for hyperlinks to more poems)

 

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Comments: 42

Deb J. May 4, 2007, 6:53am EDT
That is fantastic Magi!! I really like it!
elizabeth e. May 4, 2007, 6:57am EDT
Oh Magi...this is so beautiful and heart-wrenching. As a parent, making the decision to shed the ties that bind because there is no alternative, can and is a soul searching decision. But in the end...what is better....to raise a child with strife and keep things as they are or to forge ahead with the cut, in hopes of better tomorrows.
My, Deb, you're quick off the mark - I've only just posted this. Thank you for coming along and for your generous words. Please do come back for the rest of the series, when I look into the mirror darkly.
Good heavens, Elizabeth. I was about to post my reply to Deb, and there you are.
Thank you for coming along, and for your comments.

It still cuts me deep when I look back at when it happened. But the alternative was continuing misery in a dead marriage, where trust lay slain.

It was long ago.
elizabeth e. May 4, 2007, 7:12am EDT
Long ago or today, the pain is still there.
Maria G. May 4, 2007, 7:20am EDT
Very powerful...you broke my heart. The imagery is excellent. Kudos.
It is so, Elizabeth. It was the impact on my children that was heart breaking.
Maria, you are very kind. Thank you so much.
Faith H. May 4, 2007, 8:43am EDT
Magi, this brings back so many painful memories of my own. You've done poetic justice with this brilliant and concise piece.
Anne B. Grote May 4, 2007, 8:56am EDT
This is so sad and really makes one think about the horrible effect of divorce on children!
Bart H. May 4, 2007, 9:19am EDT
of course the above comments express what i read in your poem too...
but i think it is a touch of graphic artistry to
have those words cascade down the page that way
respecting the words: to fall.
Jerry Stubbs May 4, 2007, 9:27am EDT
I agree with all the above. Very moving and well done.
This is excellent, Magi and so very true, from another who's been divorced with a child. I'm featuring this in the group, Poets, New and Old - thanks for posting it there. Very moving, very true - I know many will relate to this.
Hugs,
Marilyn
jessie voigts May 4, 2007, 1:40pm EDT
kids feel it all, don't they, and in infinitely more ways than we can imagine. this is so powerful, magi.
Miles E. May 4, 2007, 2:31pm EDT
Wonderful. Powerful. Well phrased.
Sheila Deeth May 4, 2007, 2:48pm EDT
That was powerful. Really really good.
Aileen F. May 4, 2007, 4:14pm EDT
Wow, that was such a sad place to be, I remember. It still hurts when they are grown and you can't fix things.
mona d. May 4, 2007, 4:46pm EDT
so bittersweet, magi. but it also reminds me that a (my) mother's love can soothe even the deepest wounds...
Thank you very much for the compliment, Faith. But I am sorry that it sparked those memories in you. That time is behind us. my friend.
Thank you, Anne. Yes, it is the devastating impact on children that is the biggest downside of divorce.
Bart, thank you as well. The line formatting tried to mimic the falling; and the three words per line mimic the three faces involved.
Thank you, Jerry.
Marilyn, thank you very much for your generous words and for the honour of featuring this in Poets, New and Old.

Love and Light to you.
Jessie, children don't understand it, but their world falls apart at the very seams. And thank you.
Miles, you are so kind, and I thank you for it.
And thank you, too, Sheila.
Aileen, to look into the dark glass at the yesterdays can bring back all the sadness and hurt and bewilderment. That's why it is not something I do all that often. Yet here I am, doing so in a series.
Yes, Mona, only love can soothe the deep pain - and time. Thank you for sharing.
Sheri Fresonke H. May 5, 2007, 2:21am EDT
What a killer ending line, really good.
Thank you, Sheri. It was death to experience.
Pamela G. May 5, 2007, 8:54am EDT
I was really moved by this one.
Dan B. May 5, 2007, 12:51pm EDT
Hey you little brat, the shell cracked, the chick is nice, and flights are welcome. Do not discourage the fellows enroute to forward engineering heaven whether we find ourselves in anyones helll or not. Seriously. I do eo enjoy much of your humor and would comment more on mor frequent shorter stufff. you a re a majician of wordworking.
Thank you very much, Pamela. This is one in a series of five.
Thanks for coming along, Dan, and for the second half of your comments. I don't understand the first part, though.
Janna O'Donnell May 5, 2007, 9:20pm EDT
This is so sad and tender.
Thank you, Janna - it still makes me sad when I look back on this event.
Karolyn Q. May 6, 2007, 8:05pm EDT
Beautiful.
Karolyn, thank you.
Bijou *~MotherGrizzly~* M. May 7, 2007, 6:39pm EDT
The form on this is really appealing.
Thank you, Bijou - it mimics falling.
John Harris Beck May 10, 2007, 12:37pm EDT
Yes.
Hello, John, thanks for stopping by.

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