by amanda w.
Member since:
August 30, 2006

Free at Last

April 25, 2007 04:49 AM UTC (Updated: April 25, 2007 07:59 AM UTC)
views: 0 | comments: 36

 

Cluttered, claustrophobic room

Cleaning up his mess

Breathing his breath

My back and lungs collapse

 

Blindfolded; held hostage

Pinned in a butterfly album

Wings flaccid in lethargy

Too tired to fight; too injured to fly

 

I see the window of change

Break free from the shackles

Inhale the sun in a lucid dream

Coast on jasmine breeze

 

Balanced by my Guardian’s sigh

 

 

 

Comments: 36

Spencer T. Apr 25, 2007, 5:02am UTC
I hovered round waiting
for a master piece from you
Now, with my prayers answered
feel I can fly, just like you do.

Marvelous!
HGM Moya Goatley Apr 25, 2007, 6:09am UTC
Long may your Guardian sigh. Splendid poem. Moya
Lawrence U. Apr 25, 2007, 6:15am UTC
Excellent poetry, amanda. The stanza "too tired to fight, too injured to fly" captures the moment very nicely, indeed. Thanks for the thought!
Angie O. Apr 25, 2007, 6:59am UTC
Wonderful Amanda, the buildup to a wonderful ending.
Serina Matteson Apr 25, 2007, 7:22am UTC
Amanda, amazing as always. This too have a fimiliar feeling to me. Very powerful.
Debbie H. Apr 25, 2007, 7:25am UTC
So happy to see you back!!! Your Guardian sighs...and your friends hold together with much love!!! Missed you Amanda!!!
Dawn M Apr 25, 2007, 8:14am UTC
Beautifully written. Sure hope you're feeling better and the pain goes away soon. I know how long the injuries of a car accident can sometimes hold on. Take care of yourself Amanda.
amarpreet k. Apr 25, 2007, 8:51am UTC
Amanda thats a nice way to make a comeback ... i read this three times and got different meaning all the three times ..
wonderful work
amarpreet k. Apr 25, 2007, 8:52am UTC
And get well soon ...take care
Joe H. Apr 25, 2007, 8:59am UTC
Your poems always fail to dissapoint me :) Great work!
Paul L. Apr 25, 2007, 9:15am UTC
Luv the sentiments in this piece. 10
mona d. Apr 25, 2007, 9:17am UTC
welcome back, sweety. and you've returned with a bang - a brilliant bang.
Fred Hose Apr 25, 2007, 10:19am UTC
What a gripping poem Amanda. As Amarpreet said, I had to read it again to get the full impact. It's really powerful.
Don't feel alone. I hurt my back doing foolish things on a mountain. Going for an op on 3 may...pain pills till then.
Apryl Just Apryl Apr 25, 2007, 10:19am UTC
This is powerful and so familiar all at once. I am so sorry to hear of your injury, please take care my friend and keep writing.
btw-You were the only one who caught the meanng behind the haunting

Love Ya~
Kathryn Flynn Apr 25, 2007, 10:24am UTC
Marvelous, amanda. these things are so difficult - love, life.
Faith H. Apr 25, 2007, 10:24am UTC
Wonderful, breathtaking, releasing the sigh! Take care, Amanda, and heal for us.
Fred D. Apr 25, 2007, 10:34am UTC
Beautiful,
Take good care!
Barbary Chaapel Apr 25, 2007, 11:42am UTC
Strong language, beautifully rendered, Amanda.
Dolphi D. Apr 25, 2007, 12:03pm UTC
Excellent poem. It is great to feel free from a suffocating environment.
Priscilla P. Apr 25, 2007, 12:18pm UTC
Amanda, Your emotions are so powerful nd so well expressed. I wish I were there. I have been so long a prisoner of trying to please. I so long to be free.
Nice to have you back Ms Amanda...
I have missed these, and you.
Cecile V. Apr 25, 2007, 1:07pm UTC
Welcome back, Amanda!
amanda w. Apr 25, 2007, 1:36pm UTC
Wow! What a way to wake up out of a long slumber. You guys are helping me get through my vicodan withdrawls. Thanks to you all! Love~ Amanda
Nic P. Apr 25, 2007, 3:08pm UTC
Have a happy Arbor Day...The Sunflower Loves Everyone

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William Dotani Apr 25, 2007, 4:26pm UTC
So many images with few words. Masterful!
Quinn (aka Entwife) Blackburn Apr 25, 2007, 8:57pm UTC
Lovely imagery with an elegant economy of words. Welcome back, Amanda. I've posted the totem portion for your Teacher too. I just knew you'd recognize that particular Singer lol.

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U Wishing you laughter and healing
Beryl Singleton Bissell Apr 26, 2007, 12:54am UTC
A potent miniature of the rise from anguish to light. I love those final stanzas... "inhale the sun in a lucid dream, float on a jasmine dream" Such exquisite imagery.
Nanina Hawk Apr 26, 2007, 7:13pm UTC
A 10 that is what this is.
Atticus *. Apr 26, 2007, 11:37pm UTC
Beautiful release amanda. Inspired words, I'm glad you caught the jasmine breeze.
Wonderful - I can truly identify with this one, back in my other lifes past.
Deb J. Apr 27, 2007, 6:46pm UTC
An excellent poem!
Richard M. Apr 30, 2007, 5:49am UTC
Amanda... and your Guardian (Angel) sighs that you have finally seen the light and are flying free. This is an inspiring poem and is beautiful in its forceful endurance in reaching for the joys in life.
vijay kumar Apr 30, 2007, 6:35am UTC
Amanda, a great poem - as always.
'held hostage
Pinned in a butterfly album
Wings flaccid in lethargy'.... Superb!
Take care. Good to see you.
Warren Keating Apr 30, 2007, 9:50am UTC
More than just laden with imagery, this one makes me feel pain, both emotional and physical with the line between them blurred. And, then, it gives me a release from that pain and, ultimately, hope. What a great description of pain and triumph. Thanks for posting it, Amanda.
John F Walter May 31, 2007, 11:46am UTC
After such a despairing, hopeless scenario is depicted with such bleakness, the poem´s final stanzas´hope and promise come as a terrific release, and the uplifting of the spiritual life affirmed roundly. Your word choice here goes from dirty realism to sublime symbolism without losing the singularity of the speaker´s resilient voice: A remarkable shift in linguistic registers.
Tom C. Sep 24, 2007, 11:35pm UTC
Amanda - your bleak opening stanzas are matched in power by the hope you ultimately find and embrace. Breathing his breath is so sensory, it wafts off the page and envelops you with it's heaviness.

Inhale the sun in a lucid dream

This line speaks to me of autonomy, of gulping your freedom, grasping for it with all your might, in the biggest hunks you can swallow. Awesome.

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