by amanda wallin
Member since:
August 30, 2006

Amanda in the Moon

April 05, 2007 11:12 AM EDT
views: 101 | rating: 10/10 (31 votes) | comments: 36

 

Under a full moon's gaze
You spot the I in my eyes
Capture a paradox
In shades of gray
Sketch me in charcoal hues
Draw me out of darkness
Let the rays of light inspire
A portrait of your penciled muse

Gently stroke me
My bones are at your mercy
As you seep lead on my body
Immortalize my blushed repose

You rubbed me when my soul went numb
Swathed me with oils when I rusted
Bathed me when my heart grew filthy
Tickled when my mouth was grim

 

Shaded my eyes til they glowed
Drew my lips til they smirked
Colored in my wan cheeks
Painted me into a woman

 

Wherever you are
Whomever you're with
I find you each night in the moonlight
Where we kiss under a milky haze

 

I'll never forget
The things that never happened

 

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Comments: 36

Debbie H. Apr 5, 2007, 11:26am EDT
Oh...so beautiful and full of desires:) Amanda~ I fish at night, and I LOVE the moon!!! I'm definitely a moon worshipper!!! This was a hundred tens IMO...sorry I can only give you one!!!
Apryl Just Apryl Apr 5, 2007, 11:27am EDT
Wow, this is a portait in words and has a musical quality to it. I love the line "I'll never forget, The things that never happened". Amazing my dear.
Jean E. Apr 5, 2007, 11:38am EDT
gorgeous piece of poetry - thank you for sharing
Joe H. Apr 5, 2007, 11:39am EDT
Like all of your other works, this poem is just too good for Gather.
Fred Hose Apr 5, 2007, 11:48am EDT
Amanda you fill your poem with myserious longings so strong that they take on the form of a near reality.
It's beautiful how you use an artist to explore and explore your beauty and discover sensuous emotions deep down insidae of you.
It's quite breathtaking.
Virginia M. Apr 5, 2007, 12:02pm EDT
Your poen is awesome, and breathtaking! Beautiful!!!!!!!!!
Granny Janny H. Apr 5, 2007, 12:14pm EDT
Love the last lines!
chris w. Apr 5, 2007, 12:36pm EDT
"I'll never forget the things that didn't happen"

That is truly, honest to God, no bullshit, one of the best lines of poetry I've ver read. It just resonates for me.

Great job
Atticus *. Apr 5, 2007, 1:47pm EDT
amanda, this is a hauntingly beautiful an passionate poem of longing and desire. I love how you have drawn your poem out of the visual arts "draw me out of darkness" "seep lead on my body" I can relate to those kind parallels. I'm sure you are many people's muse - love your words
Deb J. Apr 5, 2007, 1:54pm EDT
Beautiful poem!
Faith H. Apr 5, 2007, 2:22pm EDT
A portrait of a beautiful dream, Amanda. I'm crazy for that last line too.
Cecile V. Apr 5, 2007, 3:17pm EDT
And you told me I need to get my works published? What about yourself, girl!
Anne B. Grote Apr 5, 2007, 3:49pm EDT
Oh, Amanda I can see you i the moon and this is a wonderful tribute to whomever! What a lucky moonmate he is!
TK Rosevear Apr 5, 2007, 4:15pm EDT
I also LOVE the last profound statement!!!!
Beautiful, as if I was not there with you...
William Dotani Apr 5, 2007, 4:57pm EDT
Fantastic. Sensual without being obscene. The flow kept me wanting to know more and more. The ending somewhat expected, but not in the least disappointing. This is one of the best poems I've read in the past 25 years. Just love your choice of words because they overwhelm with passion.
Quinn (aka Entwife) Blackburn Apr 5, 2007, 6:45pm EDT
Liquid, thoughtful, lyrical and seductive. Very interesting mix!

..
U
Angie O. Apr 5, 2007, 9:43pm EDT
I loved it Amanda, just a mixture of sensuality, love, reality, fantasy, it has it all. Great one. 10 from start to finish.
Miz Lynn aka/BooBoo Apr 5, 2007, 11:50pm EDT
Very nice, dreamy...sweet.
vijay kumar Apr 6, 2007, 3:42am EDT
Awesome poetry. Dreamy, deep, bright and great. The words have a magic drawing you close to the soul of the poem, and you start adoring it. Superb flow of images culminating in that unforgettable last lines.
'I'll never forget
The things that never happened'...
Touching the heart, the poem leaves an indelible impression. Loved it, Amanda.
Richard Melendez Apr 6, 2007, 4:18am EDT
Amanda...
I love the idea of painting love in the brush strokes of an artist. The metaphor is exquisitely sensual. I particularly like:

"You rubbed me when my soul went numb
Swathed me with oils when I rusted
Bathed me when my heart grew filthy"

Out of imaginings, I found myself longing for this "other world reality".
A song of love - superbly done.
amanda wallin Apr 6, 2007, 6:30am EDT
Thank you so much for your positive feedback. Sorry I can't thank you all individually but know I appreciate each and every one of you.
jessie voigts Apr 6, 2007, 11:48am EDT
your best, a.
Bluey B. Apr 6, 2007, 1:33pm EDT
A wonderful poem Amanda.You should be very proud of it.Brilliant.
Lawrence U. Apr 7, 2007, 1:49am EDT
A beautiful poem, Amanda. I love it with all my heart. The following line is a beauty to behold: "Gently stroke me/ my bones are at your mercy". Thanks for the sweet thought.
Sandra L. Apr 7, 2007, 3:26pm EDT
Damn, you are good! You and Nudleman should have a poem contest. It would be hard to pick a winner. I love everything you write.
Warren Keating Apr 8, 2007, 9:58pm EDT
Unbelievable, I'm speechless. You understand so much and bring us to a new awareness of life. This is truly a breathtaking work. Thanks for posting it.
Amanda,
This is a first - I have, no words. Only wow.

Hugs,
Marilyn
Heatherrrr Eloise Apr 24, 2007, 4:09am EDT
i don't even know what to say other than
beautiful.
a worthy ten for an extraordinary poem.
:]thank you.
doria c. May 15, 2007, 9:58pm EDT
Thank you,is truely lovely and elegant,leaves me with all kinds of emotion,I`m literally blushing.
Phylis S. Jul 2, 2007, 11:29pm EDT
The last line speaks so much in so few words. Wonderful.
Tom C. Sep 24, 2007, 11:24pm EDT
Amanda - I'm awestruck at the skill and craft you show in portraying your feelings so beautifully. Your sustained metaphors are tremendous as the artist creates her own fantasy, regenerating lost feelings until she is "painted into a woman."

You are one talented lady.

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