A Momentary Surfeit

Comments: 37

Charles D. Mar 28, 2007, 7:36am EDT

Very nice poem. My first read for this fine AM while I sip my coffee and tryand awaken!! Thank you Jim for you fine style!!

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Lawrence U. Mar 28, 2007, 7:45am EDT

Cool. The line "Scent my dreams" does it for me.

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Jennifer K. Mar 28, 2007, 8:41am EDT

Very nice, Jim!

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Jim Ross Mar 28, 2007, 8:52am EDT

I'm glad this worked with your coffee time, Charles. Thank you.

I appreciate that, Audrey. Thank you.

Thank you, Lawrence. I'm glad you liked it.

Thanks, jennifer.

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John Doyle Mar 28, 2007, 8:57am EDT

Excellent Jim

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Jim Ross Mar 28, 2007, 9:02am EDT

Thank you, John.

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Apryl Just Apryl Mar 28, 2007, 9:37am EDT

So sweet!

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Carrie Cahill Mar 28, 2007, 10:18am EDT

Jim, just beautiful!!

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d g. Mar 28, 2007, 12:52pm EDT

Satiation...

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Carol Lloyd Mar 28, 2007, 3:19pm EDT

sweet!

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Jim Ross Mar 28, 2007, 3:37pm EDT

Thank you April, Amy, Carrie, d m., and Carol. I appreciate your kind comments.

Amy--Those days of cold lemonade are nearby. Thanks for reminding me!

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Miz Lynn aka/BooBoo Mar 28, 2007, 3:42pm EDT

Awesome Jim, they ALWAYS are....:)))

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Jim Ross Mar 28, 2007, 3:46pm EDT

Thank you, Lynn, for making me believe.

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Larry H. Mar 28, 2007, 8:06pm EDT

thanks for sharing..

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Jim Ross Mar 28, 2007, 8:40pm EDT

My pleasure, Larry. Thank you.

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Cecile V. Mar 28, 2007, 9:19pm EDT

Very nice, Jim!

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Jim Ross Mar 28, 2007, 11:14pm EDT

Hi, Cecile--Thank you! :-)

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Virginia M. Mar 29, 2007, 3:00pm EDT

Wonderful, just wonderful, Jim!! I love the image of berries. When I was a kid,we used to go berry picking. I remember well those nice ripe straw/blackberries. Thanks for bringing back that image. Of course I know this poem speaks of someone being very special:)
This is delicious writing!

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Jim Ross Mar 29, 2007, 3:14pm EDT

Hi, Virginia. Thank you. I'm glad the poem brought back those fond memories to you. Grand times, indeed!

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J. C. Mar 29, 2007, 4:32pm EDT

I almost missed it. Jim, this is a wonderful expression of complete satisfaction! A bright spot in a rainy Spring day.

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Lisa M. Mar 29, 2007, 11:10pm EDT

This would make a wonderful part of wedding vows. I absolutely love it!!

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Jim Ross Mar 30, 2007, 2:31am EDT

Thank you, Dawn. I'm glad it does that! :-)

Thank you, Lisa. I appreciate your comment. :-)

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David P. Mar 31, 2007, 1:08am EDT

From a position of 'overwhelmed by love' you find a way to point to it with words. Your beloved is surely grateful for how you do. It 's a braid of three strands. A sense for words, a skill at building the phrase, an grateful and tender heart.

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DragonSoul !. Mar 31, 2007, 2:43am EDT

Jim ~ The way you bring sensations to life is beyond compare. Well written!

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Jim Ross Mar 31, 2007, 6:06am EDT

Thank you, David--It's interesting how this poem has been perceived; as always, I set out to make it mean as much as it can to as many people as I can reach. The notions of "what": being full; and "how": senses bombarded by a plethora of inputs, that lead to a "result": an inability to resolve detail from the collective condition, I thought, would produce a wide range of remembrances and emotions. I fear I have over-generalized in the poem so that instead of stimulating specific image-memories for folks, the result has been the reverse--like a frappéd rainbow. As always, I am in awe of your ability to discover truths and your sensitivity to the "positions" from which to launch their exposure. You are a fine colleague and friend; I appreciate your efforts immensely. Thank you again.

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Jim Ross Mar 31, 2007, 6:15am EDT

Hi, DragonSoul--Thank you for that; it's much appreciated.

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David P. Mar 31, 2007, 11:05am EDT

Very kind Jim, thank you. The way to the hearts of some is through their stomach, so the saying goes. You have given the prover a desicive flip and turned it inside out. No, the way to describe the hear is through metaphorical fete. I know how it is when you are sated with the primary courses, but the dessert is so aromatic, so engaging to the eyes, so rich and sweet to the taste, that the sacrifice of "further stuffed" must be made. I know too, as all your readers likely will by your reminder, that deep and all encompassing love is the same...can't be more full. can't resist the next course.

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Jim Ross Mar 31, 2007, 12:53pm EDT

And in so reminding, David, I momentarily abandon one of my working principles: a work that needs explaining needs more work, not excuses. But . . . you are a colleague and understand these things--hence the humble exegesis. Your analysis of what I'm working for is bang-on. So . . . excuses done, it's back to the keyboard!

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David P. Mar 31, 2007, 1:34pm EDT

Not to turn this into a formal chat. but I think the poem stands as you want it right now. My comment was that the poem itself reminds the reader without the explanation. When the comments on 'gather' like like the result of a scatter gun blast to the target, I don't think is automatically points to a deficit in the poem. Someis the blessed subjectivity of the reader, some is the nature of this site. People survey so much content from a gallping horse it is hard to let content have it way with them. I always slow dont and cool the horse when I come to you page, because I know that the scenery is too rewarding to overlook. But too, I learn this from the exchange. I can slow down with my own work too. I hurry the post and miss perfectly good opportunities to edit and nudge the poem what it want to be.

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Gordon Swanson Mar 31, 2007, 2:34pm EDT

I enjoyed your poem as alway.

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Jim Ross Mar 31, 2007, 5:18pm EDT

Your analogy is wonderful, David--vivid to be sure; If it weren't so heavy I would don a ten gallon hat for my writing stints. Thanks for the perspective . . . and the smile it caused. Whoa, boy!

Hi, Lee. My pleasure; thank you.

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