Echoes of Loneliness

Emptiness

Echoes of loneliness

Stabbing at my aching soul

Reminders of she who stole my heart

with false caresses and words tainted with deceit

Foolishly gave in turned my back to the world of the sane

she still owns a piece of my being even as she denies my loves existence

I will now put up the walls I had once created to defend against this now real ending

Blackness

Emptiness

Echoes of loneliness

Stabbing at my aching soul

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Deb J. Mar 12, 2007, 12:55pm EDT

I would rather have loved and lost than to never have known love at all, I think that is how the saying goes. When love comes knocking there is just no denying it. I love the way you make your shapes!!

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Carol Lloyd Mar 12, 2007, 3:35pm EDT

great piece

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Leslie M. Mar 12, 2007, 4:27pm EDT

No No, don't shut out love --- it's the spice of life! Honest. I know this is painful right now but you'll get through it. I promise. I've been there. It's hard to have Faith that there is light at the end of your misery........

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Juan J Martinez Mar 12, 2007, 4:59pm EDT

I have know Elena for almost five years and I have loved her every second but we don't want the same things. I have know that this was coming for sometime, but I closed my eyes to the truth. I will still hold a place for her in my heart, but it is time to move on. I will miss her and her little boy who I had grown to love like he was my own, but it is time to take another road.

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Sue D. Mar 12, 2007, 10:12pm EDT

excellent! I know this feeling.

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Barbary Chaapel Mar 13, 2007, 2:29pm EDT

Juan...

That's a strong image you've created with the tree of life for your poem's background. I'm thinking it proffers hope to the situational aspect of the poem...
Writing is healing, isn't it?

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Juan J Martinez Mar 13, 2007, 4:37pm EDT

Yes Barbary putting one's feelings down can help heal the wounds we receive.

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La Bellota Mar 13, 2007, 4:40pm EDT

I am sorry that you feel the carresses were false and words tainted with deceit. That is very sad. I hope later with the pain isn't so acute, that you will no longer feel that way. abrazos.

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Juan J Martinez Mar 13, 2007, 5:15pm EDT

thanks La Bellota

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