by Corina Carrasco
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August 16, 2006

To Watch You Leave

February 13, 2007 03:30 AM EST
views: 13 | rating: 10/10 (5 votes) | comments: 20

To watch you leave broke my heart.  I knew it was the last time I would ever see you.  That’s why I called you back.  Remember that?  I called out to you, “Hey!”  You turned and I motioned for you to come back.  You walked back toward me and I could almost feel that you were afraid I might cry or do something that would make you feel bad or guilty for breaking my heart.  Instead, I smiled at you and said, “Don’t ever forget that I love you and I will always be here for you.  Whatever you need, I’m here.”  You smiled at me, sadly and you playfully flicked the tip of my nose with your finger.  I saw the sparkle in your eyes, almost like before, but sad this time.

 
You turned and I stood in the doorway watching you walk away from me, out of my life, but not out of my heart.

 

[This was a challenge in an online group I belong to.  I thought I would share it here.] 

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Comments: 20

Linda M. Feb 13, 2007, 3:47am EST
Too sad. I hope it was fiction.
Corina Carrasco Feb 13, 2007, 3:53am EST
Sadly, no.
jadan x. Feb 13, 2007, 8:52am EST
I'm sorry that this did happen to you. That's why it sounds so realistic; Well written.
Tab B. Feb 13, 2007, 11:47am EST
I bet your nose still tingles when you think of this too, Corina.
Nana to Seven Cutiepies Feb 13, 2007, 1:01pm EST
breaking up is so hard.
Nana to Seven Cutiepies Feb 13, 2007, 1:01pm EST
I hope you have had time to feel a little better about it.
Nana to Seven Cutiepies Feb 13, 2007, 1:02pm EST
Time heals all wounds. I hope this is true for you.
Corina Carrasco Feb 13, 2007, 1:07pm EST
Tab, yes it does. Funny that you would know that. Thank you.
Corina Carrasco Feb 13, 2007, 1:09pm EST
Nana, thank you for your comments. I know it should get better with time. I think it will but it's rather fresh. I somehow think it won't get a lot better; not this time; not his one.
Carol Roach Feb 13, 2007, 1:32pm EST
It is very well written
Quite eloquent, Corina.
heartbreaking.
Time doesn't actually heal the pain.
but it does make it easier to bear.
Keep your chin up!
Corina Carrasco Feb 14, 2007, 3:14am EST
Thank you, Carol. It's good to get feedback on the writing!
Corina Carrasco Feb 14, 2007, 3:14am EST
Melissa, thank you!
Tamara L~will view, may comment~ S. Feb 14, 2007, 11:34am EST
This is sad. My heart is cold for relationships now. It's been broken once badly,and since then, I have tried and failed at relationships.
Tamara L~will view, may comment~ S. Feb 14, 2007, 11:35am EST
Let me rephrase that-- I think I didn't try at all in the relationships afterwards, because I somehow didn't want to get hurt again. I'm not trying anymore; it isn't worth it.
Corina Carrasco Feb 14, 2007, 1:18pm EST
Tamara, I agree with you. Right now, I am not trying, except if that one man turned around and came back, I'd still be there smiling.

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