by Jim Ross
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July 9, 2006

A Strain (Tanka)

January 09, 2007 07:57 AM EST
views: 94 | rating: 9.9/10 (24 votes) | comments: 38

Listen to the night while your other senses rest . . .  

 

A Strain (Tanka)  

 

Starlit symphony,

Crystal clear orchestration

Of life after dark--

Wood nymphs breathe and flutter leaves

While Jimeny rubs his wings

 

 

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Comments: 38

Terry Collett Jan 9, 2007, 8:04am EST
This has that something extra special, Jim. You have caught it just right.
Jim Ross Jan 9, 2007, 8:12am EST
Thank you, Terry.
John L. Jan 9, 2007, 8:21am EST
a fiddle and a wash tub band. Nice
Debbie G. Jan 9, 2007, 8:56am EST
Creates the experience. Good job!
John Doyle Jan 9, 2007, 9:00am EST
Good one Jim. I've missed you. Happy new year
Shawn "left this place" W Jan 9, 2007, 9:03am EST
I love the cricket song, Jim, you've caught it well.
Shelly W. Jan 9, 2007, 9:13am EST
Very nice Jim.
Virginia M. Jan 9, 2007, 9:15am EST
I love night sounds!
Bill's Spirit Jan 9, 2007, 9:20am EST
Excellento !!
Miz Lynn aka/BooBoo Jan 9, 2007, 10:25am EST
Wonderful...the music of the night!
Jim Ross Jan 9, 2007, 10:49am EST
Thank you, everyone. Your comments are beautiful.
Sue * Jan 9, 2007, 11:26am EST
Wonderful, I really felt what you were trying to say. Thank you.
Jim Ross Jan 9, 2007, 12:26pm EST
Thank you, Sue.
d g. Jan 9, 2007, 12:53pm EST
How fun! And such a nice contrast from here. A peaceful flit of snow on my hat this morning.

Love it...
Mary McCartt Jan 9, 2007, 1:33pm EST
You are so skilled at this! I enjoyed the unexepected reference to Jimeny.
Jim Ross Jan 9, 2007, 1:55pm EST
Thank you, Mary G.

Hi, d m. I guess I'm thinking ahead. Thank you.

Jimeny, his song, and his attitude embodied the lighthearted night mood I tried to evoke, Mary M. I hope it found the mark. I'm glad you enjoyed this.
Jim Ross Jan 9, 2007, 1:57pm EST
Thank you, James. I appreciate that.
Jim Ross Jan 9, 2007, 3:33pm EST
Hi, Zenith--Thank you for that.
Danielle Salem Jan 9, 2007, 7:00pm EST
i like it jim it makes you think about who jimeny really is!!
Jim Ross Jan 9, 2007, 7:43pm EST
I love the way fictional characters grow as people embrace them, Danielle; as authors and artists add dimensions to them until they pass effortlessly through the doors of culture by their own means, full citizens of our hearts and minds.
Raquel Beeby Jan 9, 2007, 9:54pm EST
The pace of words made me listen carefully, and that awakened my other senses rather than letting them rest. Vivid.
Carol Roach Jan 9, 2007, 10:15pm EST
I love story quality with Jimeny
Elisha E. Jan 9, 2007, 10:53pm EST
I think that this may be the most beautiful poem I have ever read.
Jim Ross Jan 10, 2007, 12:01am EST
Thank you, Raquel, for a discerning read. I'm glad the poetic sleight of hand acted as a poultice to stimulate those senses.

Thank you, Carol. The little green guy has that ability; I'm glad you like it.

Hi, Elisha. Wow! The kindness in your words is beyond measure. Thank you.
Jim Ross Jan 10, 2007, 1:16am EST
Hi, Liz--Sometimes what we can't see in the dark at least sounds good, eh! Thank you for that.
♥kyra D. Jan 11, 2007, 12:27am EST
Love it!!
Debra H. Jan 11, 2007, 12:53am EST
*heavy sigh* I loved Jimeny Cricket as a kid!
Jim Ross Jan 11, 2007, 1:50am EST
Thank you, Kyra.

I'm with you, Debra. He's cool!
julian 'blighted karma' three Jan 11, 2007, 10:00am EST
I do not think that anyone could read your fine words and not be transported into the very scene, immersed in the sights, sounds, and fragrances that envelop the weary traveller. Well done, as always.
Jim Ross Jan 12, 2007, 1:25am EST
Hi, Julian--I appreciate those kind words. Thank you.
Corina Carrasco Jan 13, 2007, 3:31pm EST
crystal clear orchestration
of life after dark

Wonderfully worded! I just loved this one, Jim!
Jim Ross Jan 13, 2007, 3:34pm EST
Thank you, Corina. Have a great day!
Eucliffe L. Jan 30, 2008, 9:23am EST
Life after 'death to the turmoil of the noisy obtruding world'....i.e. soul life where man/woman plumbs deep....been there, tried like you to connect. THANKS FOR THE EXPOSURE !
Jim Ross Jan 30, 2008, 11:57am EST
My pleasure, Eucliffe. Thank you for the comment. A little magic to fill the starlit night.
Coffee Lady Feb 5, 2008, 6:18pm EST
"Wood nymphs breath and flutter leaves
While Jimeny rubs his wings"

Jim the way you tie up this one starlit scene is too magical! Beautiful read
( Where was my head? I missed this one...)

Thank you from your Friend
CoffeeLady
Mary Sue Searles Feb 27, 2008, 6:49am EST
"Wood nymphs breathe and flutter leaves"
"While Jimeny rubs his wings"

Beautifully descriptive. One of your best.
Jim Ross Feb 7, 2009, 12:54pm EST
Thank you, Mary Sue. Much appreciated.

I'm glad it showed, Poet Dawn. You sit in the darkness of a garden, surrounded by noises of the night; you let your mind journey to the crannies of experience to mythologize what was real, and return you into the fragrant nocturnal symphony of the present, new metaphors soothing your soul. Thank you for the nice comment.

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