Erehwon

December 26, 2006 09:28 AM EST

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Here in white Erehwon

Her hair will fall on my face

She will kiss me.

She will come out of the

Whiteness of the tablet

To press her lips against me

And hold her hand against my cheek

It will be better than it was

We will watch the elephants loading teak

The sailboats and the rowboats loading teak

And there’ll be no need to speak.

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Comments: 5

Anne B. Grote Dec 26, 2006, 10:43am EST

I like the imaginative aspect of this poem. It reminds me of a Merchant-Ivory film.

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George L. Dec 26, 2006, 11:18am EST

I like it too Harold. The last line in particular is.....satisfying.

One tiny editorial idea: you might want to consider replacing the contraction with the words, 'there will'

In any case it is a very nice poem.

GL

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julian 'blighted karma' three Dec 26, 2006, 12:32pm EST

Excellent - and my own initial impression is of a meeting between Poe and Fellini !
The imagery and the dream-quality flow so smoothly!

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Lynn Doiron Dec 26, 2006, 7:36pm EST

Really like out of the whiteness of the tablet and the general feel of other worldlineess about this one. Ditto to above comment regarding the strength of the latter parts -- I think the repeitions work especially well there.

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