Conclusion

Dear gowthami,
The image of the letter is not clear...not readable....please post a clear one or type the contents...................so I am unable to hit the right note at your verse.....

I don't think the letter image is supposed to be clear is it? I think it's just a symbol of the poem itself....just my interpretation....I like it very much Gautami!

Clarissa, you got that exactly right. letter image has to be unreadable. Symbolic. Thanks.

Shanthalakshmi, do you mind spelling my name right? (gowthami...eeeks!) Some people just can't take a hint even if it is staring at their face!

Still very beautiful!

Oooops sorry, I will be careful this time.....Gautami??? Not some buddie, many can't take hint when something is staring at their faces for the first time...but one would surely appreciate corrections that are genuine...and happy if they dont repeat the same?
One question_
Why have you put the image separately which can be maximized to be read? if the image is purely symbolic?
I am still not able to hit the right note at your verse....however I cherish the style. It is unique.....shall catch up later....

This is beautiful Gautami!!!!

the letter is unreable please type it or make it more clearer

Yes, this is beautiful. How come so many don't get the symbology of the letter?

I love these words. I also like the paper as a symbol. Nice work

The realm of coincidence of 'personal distances' and ' external understanding' at its moment of intrusion is beautifully symbolised in the letter image which is still hard to read....It is a real time symbol that will mock at all the vain endevours of intrusion...whenever you try to read it and re read it and defend the cause of the theme which is true.....n very true Goutami!

"Warped and stained,
stay unwrapped,"
well chosen, musical adjectives...

perhaps a return to sender on the flowers and save a stamp on the letters.
These modes of 'communication' are easily set aside, yet saved, to savour the love or lack thereof, at a later date.

very beautiful

Very nice, much enjoyed.

Most of us get it G-A-U-T-A-M-I. This is beautiful.

Sublime & Surreal

Short, sweet and sad. A lingering sorrow..I love the poem which pricks you like a pin.

ha, really liked this one. WOrds packed tight and powerful message. Well done.

Shanthalakshmi,

I think the poem is self explanatory. If I have to explain 6 lines in 60, why write such pithy ones?

The letter is symbolic. Nothing to be read in that. Why would I want everyone reading my personal letters?

Lovely! And I agree with your comment about why you should not have to provide a long explanation, Gautami. The beauty of this poem is in it's simplicity and in the words NOT read or spoken.

"Why would I want everyone reading my personal letters?"
Ah, Well said! This is a universal spirit.
But a lopsided view of the same is what I intend at in my criticism which is a subjective disintegration of the theme (in the eye of the beholder)....

Yes Goutami, That is what makes your letter a real time symbol to me! Why not?

Self explanatory indeed! And any work of art is! We are here and glad to add wings to your imagination....
So let me harness the moments of intrusion in life and into your Image both at once until the idea of symbol is lost into the universal spirit.......And now let me give another try at it! O ' What makes me curious...to know???

Gautami, lovely poem..pure heartfelt realms of love gone awry. You need not explain....

very evocative! Haven't been in love myself, but I think there is a sense of unfairness here.

Poetry is interpreted differently by different people. I don't think I need to explain that. For me poetry is such where I go beyond the realms of the words.

Thanks bonnie, minnie, Shawn, Antonio and Raamesh.

And Shanthalaksmi, my name is GAutami not Goutami.

G-A-U-T-A-M-I ..........

Dear Gautami,
I thought I should remove the comment and have post it again...And here it is!!!

"The "letters" of your verse
May read differently to different souls
And convey passion that go beyond words too
yet the 'space' is just the same!"

aloha Gautami - i like the poem in the way it struck me initially. for me the poem is about a caring that was/is between two people. even now there is a caring between these people altho shifted in some way.

without the discussion about "being able to read" the letter it would not have occured to me to read the letter for several reasons. for one this is not what the poem is about, so it is not necessary to read it.

for me written forms of writing, as in hand written letters, have a visual beauty in themselves, without having to be read. what they say does not change the visual beauty in itself. there are many insights that can be gained from seeing a letter, especially a hand written letter, without having to read the letter.

a number of times i have created pieces that have the look and feel of a letter visually to varying degrees. these pieces do not have words made up of (alphabet) letters but lines that have the feel of letters and words. letters (alphabet letters) are created with line, which is the main element of drawing. beautiful lines make a beautiful drawing. some of these pieces have been framed. some have been posted. some still remain in sketchbooks and other places.

the program that Gather uses, automaticly generates the larger visual when a visual is to be placed in an article. i do not know if that larger visual can be deleted once the image is in the body of the article or not. if the larger version functions the way i intend it to function (in this case not be readable as to content but readable as in "it is a letter"), then there is no need for me to delete it.

i think your poem and presentation with the letter are fine as it is. certainly there are a variety of ways it could be presented, this is often the case. how you choose to present it is what is important, imo.

cool on this poem. aloha Wrick

A deft, ironic poem that makes of symbolic exchange a closed circle of untouched, unfelt loss: You imply so much in so few words, here, Gautami, and do it so well.