by Virginia M.
Member since:
August 31, 2006

Artificial Lure

November 28, 2006 09:17 AM EST
views: 29 | rating: 9.7/10 (6 votes) | comments: 12

Deal with me fairly,

That is all I want from you.

Is that asking much?

For love not to cast me out,

Else, I drown in deep waters

 

 

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Comments: 12

Sue * Nov 28, 2006, 10:31am EST
This is beautifully done.
gautami tripathy Nov 28, 2006, 10:58am EST
Very well done.
Ricky Fico Nov 28, 2006, 11:23am EST
Reminds me: "Sex may perpetuate the species but it is love that perpetuates the soul." I remember the day I wrote that, my heart nearing the transition. Very nice, Virginia
Apryl Just Apryl Nov 28, 2006, 11:37am EST
Virgina, This is wonderful, Thank You for sharing. You never told me, did your daughter like the poem?
Mary H. Nov 28, 2006, 3:19pm EST
Very clever wording Virginia ... good job!
Carol Roach Nov 28, 2006, 6:17pm EST
nice poem
Donna M. Nov 28, 2006, 10:34pm EST
lovely....
amanda wallin Nov 29, 2006, 4:02am EST
There's a desperation in your tone that's palpable. Brilliant metaphor!
Edward Nudelman Nov 29, 2006, 8:15am EST
yes, it is a reasonable request, the request of love.. yet not always fulfilled, sad to say. Superb poem, Virginia.
Richard Melendez Nov 30, 2006, 12:50am EST
Virginia... love the metaphor... a pleading and yearning request in danger of being cast out.
graywyvern g. Dec 5, 2006, 6:07pm EST
enjoyed this one.

m.

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