on the road

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i traverse the same path

over and over again

sometimes silent,

at others screaming

crowds that are same

and yet not quite

most in a hurry

few pausing

business as usual

time running out

but a few don't care

i pause, savour, inhale

trying to hold on to you.

i turn around

remembering you left

long time back.

your memories are

all I have now

bereft of soul.

©gautami.tripathy

~Nov 23, 2006

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Shaunee C. Nov 24, 2006, 2:27pm EST

Good and well said.

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♯ ♪ Nov 24, 2006, 2:37pm EST

Very nice. Is this a loved one long gone?

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John L. Nov 24, 2006, 3:08pm EST

I get this feeling when the person in front of me runs the red light and leaves me to wait for it to turn green.

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Shelly W. Nov 24, 2006, 5:06pm EST

nice poem,shelly

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Tonia, who hugs trees G. Nov 24, 2006, 5:41pm EST

Nice one - I like the beginning, contemplating the ways in which we travel the same roads again and again, yet they are never quite the same.

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Penelope Malinky Nov 24, 2006, 8:15pm EST

Beautiful!

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Johnny Gregory Nov 24, 2006, 8:31pm EST

Treading the same old path day after day, doing the same old mundane tasks and seeing the same faces can make life appear so boring.
In your case, your heart reached out for the comfort of someone that was once close to you but who had gone and was now beyond of reach.
At such times, lonliness can become almost unbearable.
I could feel the emotion in this poem.

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vijay kumar Nov 24, 2006, 9:37pm EST

I simply love this poem! So beautiful, tender and melting. The penetrating emotion in this poem touches me. ' I traverse the same path over and aver again sometimes silent, at others screaming...' These lines will remain in the mnd for a long time.

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Barin M. Nov 24, 2006, 11:12pm EST

I like the pathos expressed here with a releasing sense and it is coming out by natural poetic wording as well as the flow of poem itself! Nice naturally poetic work, Gautami!

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