manoj, "I am snoring loud" is a great hinge line. "Futures progress with vigor" is a stunning affirmation of how life goes on, goes on, with or without us, but we are all swept up by its flow.
Excellent tanka, Manoj. It gives me the impression of an eternal construction project with the detritus "retired" as the work progresses. It's a very satisfying read.
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Last two lines--profound!
Have nice times.
Your appreciations always encourage me.... Thank you for taking time to read my poems.