Goddess 2.0

I lay awake — your flame my only triumph.

Beside you, the kingdom beyond the grave is nothing,

to the embracing desert.

When your eyes are closed

the earth veiled.

Warriors of the drunkenness do not hope

for more than a voyage out of fear.

I, I, you know,

In my satiety,

discerning — you are born

again, in

him, and

the salt of your arms,

warm gentle lips,

to ignite me,

kindle and quell,

ever to remind me

your nakedness

haunting me, as not

outside me. Inside us.

Comments: 15

Edward Nudelman Nov 16, 2006, 9:26pm EST

Well, little can be said about this poem except that it's the finest thing you've ever written.

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Edward Nudelman Nov 16, 2006, 9:28pm EST

Okay, after I've recovered from the shock, I will say one more thing. Beauty and genius. Sorry (that was two things)

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Laurie White Nov 16, 2006, 9:34pm EST

Wow. This is beautiful, Will.

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Faith H. Nov 16, 2006, 9:36pm EST

Ed does this indepth shock thing. I am going to follow with the chick thing, which is, wow, Will, you are such a romantic. A poet to fantasize about.

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Will Evans Nov 16, 2006, 9:44pm EST

Ed. Of course your love I feel -- thank you. I was trying to some distillation of Will's emotions - which of course can be a precarious ordeal.

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Will Evans Nov 16, 2006, 10:02pm EST

Terry,
Strange - because i have a notebook filled with writing like this, but the self-important side of me says it's not pubishable.

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manoj sanyal Nov 17, 2006, 4:22am EST

CLAP CLAP!!! ... WOW!!

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Magi the magical poet is riding the wind again Nov 17, 2006, 5:25am EST

She haunts you, Will. Let her and the sadness go.

This one has to be your very finest poem. It is very impressive! 10 stars from me.

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Will Evans Nov 17, 2006, 9:42am EST

Oh the pain of center justified verse. Yes.

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Quinn (aka Entwife) Blackburn Nov 17, 2006, 11:18am EST

Wonderfully constructed and evocatively written.

Wishing You Laughter ~Entwife

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Laura M. Nov 17, 2006, 8:18pm EST

This immersion into the deepest heart channels of love and fear and clarity and disguise, whispers through the desert of aloneness veiled to anything but the memory of the captivating flame, through the inebriated sea of fear to embrace love haunting from an exchanged intimacy that still fuels the soul with hope, having been completely "seen" and sated in the merging and revealed through naked exposure to be vulnerable and desiring of more than just a memory, that seems now to also be mourned. This is so sensual and courageous, Will, and I agree, one of your finest shared heart moments. BEAUTIFUL!

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Ferrero R. Nov 18, 2006, 1:47pm EST

Will this is absolutely beautiful and shows your soft, marshmallow centre...you should show it more often. Very, very nice!

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John F Walter Nov 20, 2006, 5:53pm EST

The lyricism of this epiphanic poem builds stanza by stanza, holding back its speaker's fullness of feeling in the "embracing desert" but not his caring and deeply appreciative sense of the lover he has merged with, in a near perfect combination of feeling and structure wrought with the depth of a consciously realized moment in language that has deservedly earned Edward Nudelman's highest accolades. A gem, Mr. Evans.
Bravo.

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