Pixel at Play (tanka)

Playful chasing tease

Sweet winds stirring up the leaves

Games with clever trees

Elusive prey earthward bound

Vanquished foes end in crunches

( I recycled parts of a poem I wrote about the Haiku Master Basho's love in his old age for his bannana tree to make this poem. It seemed to fit our newest puppy (pixel) playing in the yard better Even though I thought the other poem was more beautiful, this one is more playful)

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webster merle Nov 15, 2006, 1:19pm EST

its wonderful!! very special poem..

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Marsha F. Nov 15, 2006, 1:56pm EST

I like it! It is especially relavent to a puppy at play in the leaves. I can see it as I read.

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Anne B. Grote Nov 15, 2006, 3:44pm EST

It's interesting and I like it and the best haiku are about nature!

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Atticus *. Nov 15, 2006, 10:11pm EST

Thank you all for your supportive comments.

Yea Jill, It was getting a little dark around here wasn't it? And as for the trees - I'm sort of fascinated by the idea of conscious trees, what they would think of us and how they would engage us. Thanks

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Mark Jepsen Nov 15, 2006, 10:24pm EST

Good job, Atticus. Conscious, clever trees... makes me flash back to the 70's, but I'm guessing that's not what you had in mind. Nothing better than leaves on a crisp fall day.

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Jim Ross Nov 16, 2006, 2:04pm EST

Elegant element handling here, Atticus, gracious unfolding of the serious play of life.

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amanda wallin Nov 16, 2006, 4:25pm EST

Gorgeous imagery with a touch of foreboding energy. Brilliant!

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Atticus *. Nov 16, 2006, 10:03pm EST

Thank you Mark, Jim, and amanda, for your kind comments.

Mark, maybe concious wasn't the right word. How about "aware" (does that still sound a little paisley?)

Jim, play is serious business,...as is the joy of life. Attitudes I see often in your poetry. Thanks

amanda, you always see the mystery, thank you.

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sea gull l. Nov 23, 2006, 9:12pm EST

the leaves the puppy, you have brought forth the things that make life a joy, and you did so in a most delightful way!

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Atticus *. Dec 2, 2006, 9:07am EST

Thanks juniper! I'm glad you like it. But you are a very playful soul yourself. Get yourself a little dog if you want one.. you won't regret it. As for the trees...all you have to do is listen.

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