by Jim Ross
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July 9, 2006

Lull (Cinquain)

October 11, 2006 12:38 PM EDT (Updated: October 11, 2006 09:23 PM EDT)
views: 62 | rating: 10/10 (13 votes) | comments: 17

Lull

 

No chill

On the prairie,

Dead and awaiting white,

No wind to strip the illusion

Of calm

 

Copyright 2006 Jim Ross

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Comments: 17

Leah Christensen Oct 11, 2006, 2:22pm EDT
Very good.
Cheryl W. Oct 11, 2006, 2:59pm EDT
Loved it..
Val G. Oct 11, 2006, 3:26pm EDT
Great poem. Looks like several people here are thinking ahead toward winter.
Brandea M. Oct 11, 2006, 3:39pm EDT
Beautiful writing! Love the imagery.
John L. Oct 11, 2006, 3:42pm EDT
HMM...the illusion of calm....like the duck on the pond, calm and serene on the surface but paddling like hell under the surface just to stay still.
Jim Ross Oct 11, 2006, 7:19pm EDT
Thank you, everyone.

Amy--Have you published any of the rictameters you speak of? Perhaps they're better than you think! You pay such wonderful attention to the details of your poems I always look forward to reading them. I'm glad you liked my cinquain. Thank you.

Hmm. Never thought of it that way, Val. Thank you for mentioning it.

Beautiful, John. I love the scenario of unseen work, and your words portray it well.
Shelly W. Oct 12, 2006, 2:52am EDT
no wind to strip the illusion of calm,i love this!Shell
Edward Nudelman Oct 12, 2006, 7:38am EDT
Superb, Jim
Jim Ross Oct 12, 2006, 9:53am EDT
Thank you, Shelly and Ed. I appreciate that.
vijay kumar Oct 12, 2006, 11:30am EDT
No wind to strip the illusion of calm. I loved it. Woderful words.
Carol Roach Oct 12, 2006, 11:35am EDT
excellent
Jim Ross Oct 12, 2006, 7:30pm EDT
Thank you, Vijay. I appreciate that.
Jim Ross Oct 12, 2006, 7:31pm EDT
Thank you, Carol.
d g. Oct 13, 2006, 7:03am EDT
I can sense the quiet forces at work, the sun bleaching and an insect chewing.
Jim Ross Oct 13, 2006, 3:50pm EDT
That's precisely it, d m. Very perceptive. Thank you.
Jen G. Feb 21, 2009, 4:12pm EST
Another awesome visual Jim. Thanks!
Shelbia C. Jun 21, 2009, 2:53am EDT

I enjoy these

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