My Madness II

this poem s format is so different and so good
you are a wonderful poet

Good comeback to, but also awareness of, Chomsky's achievement as linguist and the most world famous intellectual, by using transforms to transform the transformer in his own universal syntax, through projection into future and awareness of the gap between language and political reality (especially when Noam gets too synthetic and systemic, generalizing from STRUCTURES OF SYNTAX (1966) to political hierarchies and trying to make too many contradistinctions within different levels that belong in others, while ignoring Foucault's fundamental and correct perception of discursive site.; You remain an openminded pre-Simulationist using "elsewhere" as a vector to observe yourself as an open system operating at different levels of meaning and distribution of self in meme spaces.
Again, like Leverenze with his self/icon poetics, you are doing amazingly original poetic innovation here, though in a sense using a more radical concept of backweb which frankly I haven't ever seen done so extensively and so well, since you actually write poetry superbly with exact use of descriptive terms that is both allusive and in pragmatic/linguistic sense (Strawson to P. Grice) implicative, playing with ambiguity in the manifest text but then reinforcing lexical meaning with the latent text (the links that lead to texts that must be assembled to fully "get" the fully meaning of the interactive poem) in a way that recalls, but surpasses, Cortazar's Rayuela (HOPSCOTCH).
This all of course a very stuffy way of saying, Will, Poet prophet peer and friend, you are on a frickin' roll! (Just don't drink anymore Nyquil anytime too soon, or I will personally fly to Boston and hide the bottle!)

Thanks, John - I decided to explore new ways of keeping a tight form while amplifying meaning through pointers, so that the poetic feels like it's contracting, while the meaning is expanding. Never really knows what comes out of experimentation/innovation, but not for it's own sake - just searching out new ways of conveying meaning on multiple fractal levels of abstraction, but at most base level, still something and not just nothingless jibberish.

I really like this one, Will. Less words and right to the point. Nice.

The links bring this poem into another dimension, the blueness of them rises from the page, and I click once (on diction), then find myself in another Stargate, I jump one place, another, forget I am connected to these 23 lines, but they still sit here, wait, wait, know I will reel myself back in, then launch again. Interesting effect, this is.

oh man, I'm getting inkling here of a new mode of Web 10.0 communicative text. The reader is either bound or freed up by this linked backbeat. I like it very much, very unique, and adds layers untold to your already fine verse. Are we to think protagonist or antagonist views presented in each link... how do they sift in and make the final report. Oh don't get sucked up into all of that, dear presimmer, and certainly not in a superb Will Evans tour d'force.

Ok. So I'm sitting here with 15 tabs open in Firefox trying to put this all together. So complex. A mental puzzle like a good crossword or brain teaser. That's a trite comparison, but close. I just heard Bush's Machine Head. How appropriate. An apt description for my impression of Will Evans. Sincerely in the most positive sense. I am now exhausted, so part III will have to wait until later.

Sorry about that man - the original idea was to create a complete picture from a condensed poem, but also one that could just stand on it's own, or be blown out into a lot of different nodal points that all provide background, juxtoposition, context to the lines. There is a better way to do this, but not with the current architecture of Gather, because what I wanted was multiple modal windows with varying degrees of opacity and being able to navigate through Z-Layers, surfacing concepts as you move through the poem. These are all ideas for which this web 2.0 just falls flat in its current implementation. Further, it would be better if I could just define named links to achor points with assigned meta-data and when the mouse moves over the linked text, a comment popup ballon would appear with just the relavant text highlighted - again something for which Gather is incapable of manifesting my ideas.
Part 3 is still nascent, I'm in the process of both fleshing out III, and then I want them all linked together, cross-linked, and presented in 3 dimensions through a hyperbolic tree. If I continued down this path, we could also introduce time as the fourth dimension, and watch the linked poems and the pointers grow and shift over time.

Oh, don't get me wrong. I thoroughly enjoyed the journey.

I hope that one day Gather will be capable of what you're describing. Sounds like it'll be one heck of an experience.

Syntax is indeed an odd phenomenom. How did it evolve? Words of course have a obvious lineage but the order of words is myterious and more important than almost anything else in langugage.