by manoj sanyal
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May 5, 2006

Just a bit more …Just

September 30, 2006 11:13 PM EDT (Updated: October 07, 2006 08:10 AM EDT)
views: 20 | rating: 9.7/10 (3 votes) | comments: 13

Just a bit more…just…
I could have touched that bluish sky
And perhaps, spread my hands in high
With the wings of ultimate pleasure.
I wish I were a Siberian Goose as treasure
Flying from one country to other.

I might have forgotten the past
That lured me to think without sportsmanship
Not allowing me to share the leadership
And fly in formation as a team over sea bay.
This made me a loner of yesterday
In the life's caged jungles, perhaps…

Let me try a bit hard…
Forcing my mind not to look back
And dream for the future with some luck
With its exquisite beauty and laughter
Along with freedom funs and lights brighter.
I just need to try a bit more…just.

Just a little to go…just…
No time to look backwards now.
Have I forgotten the past? Have I somehow?
Perhaps, to try a bit further…just…
I could have touched the bluish sky fast.
Shall I?

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Comments: 13

Harold Lorin Oct 1, 2006, 3:34am EDT
Lovely image and splendid metaphor.

HL
manoj sanyal Oct 1, 2006, 11:29pm EDT
Thanks Harold.
John F Walter Oct 3, 2006, 1:06am EDT
The way you convey yearning and striving is absolutely superb here, manoj. This is a first rate poem. I agree with Harold Lorin, wonderful use of the metaphor of flight.
manoj sanyal Oct 3, 2006, 6:41am EDT
Thanks John.
Have nice time.
Abhineeta Inky Oct 8, 2006, 3:04am EDT
lovely!
manoj sanyal Oct 8, 2006, 3:45am EDT
Thanks Abhineeta.
vijay kumar Oct 8, 2006, 7:33am EDT
words of reverberating poetry. deep and vigorous. not just a bit more i need a lot more from you.
HGM Moya Goatley Oct 8, 2006, 5:15pm EDT
Try, reach, go for it. Good job. Moya
manoj sanyal Oct 8, 2006, 11:13pm EDT
Thanks Vijay for appreciations.
Thanks Moya.
Take care.
Vijay Nair Oct 8, 2006, 11:40pm EDT
Great one Dada.
manoj sanyal Oct 9, 2006, 6:36am EDT
Thanks Vijay.
Beautiful, that's the only word I have for this :)
manoj sanyal Oct 16, 2006, 7:46am EDT
Thanks Marilyn for appreciation.

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