by Virginia M.
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August 31, 2006

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September 26, 2006 03:19 PM EDT (Updated: September 26, 2006 03:52 PM EDT)
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moves some

when better lives 

that all live thereafter,

Nay come hither, care for mankind,

when things change, subsequently, thus do I.

I do thus, subsequently, change things when

mankind, for care, hither come nay

thereafter, live all that

when better lives

some  moves

time.

 

 

Okay, what's your opinion?

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Comments: 2

Edward Nudelman Sep 27, 2006, 8:50am EDT
it's a fun wordlplay, although it appears to me you have something profound to say, and I'd like to see another version that concentrates more on the message then the wordplay... but I liked it!

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