Dark Thing to Do (Dodoitsu)

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Mandi -Watch where the chalk-white arrows go. To the place where the sidewalk ends. S.S. Aug 24, 2006, 11:52pm EDT

did you fall down?

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William M. Aug 25, 2006, 12:01am EDT

"twist tomorrow"??

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Jim Ross Aug 25, 2006, 12:31am EDT

Not this time, Mandi, but I'm sure we all know the feeling?

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Jim Ross Aug 25, 2006, 12:36am EDT

I assure you, William, if you twist your ankle tonight, tomorrow will be a skewed version of what you plan for it. Hope you liked the poem. I don't see a rating.

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Jim Ross Aug 25, 2006, 1:13am EDT

Thanks dear Candida. Your smile is worth it all.

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Carol Roach Aug 25, 2006, 3:13am EDT

hey I would get dizzy

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Cheryl W. Aug 25, 2006, 7:39am EDT

Oh....been there, done that, Jim. Ouch!

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Stephen McAllister Aug 25, 2006, 9:44am EDT

You are quite the master of the short form Jim. Well done.

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John F Walter Aug 26, 2006, 10:11am EDT

Great use of a physical image to convey an abstract notion of an uncertain future. You are truly a master of short poems, Jim.

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Carrie P. Aug 26, 2006, 9:42pm EDT

i almost feel that twist, Good job!

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Jim Ross Sep 19, 2006, 9:09pm EDT

Thank you, everyone.

I'm glad your friend saved you, Juniper. Twisted ankles aren't fun.

Thank you, John. That is precisely what I'm working for.

Hi, B.J.--Dodoitsu is an unrhymed Japanese poetry form in 26 syllables made up of four lines of 7,7,7,5 syllables. I'm glad you liked this one. I look forward to seeing one of yours!

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Jim Ross Sep 27, 2006, 3:11pm EDT

Thanks, B.J., breaking out specific types of poetry makes sense, especially when you're looking to read a particular form.

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