Misplaced Slumber (Cinquain)

August 06, 2006 02:53 PM EDT

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A nocturnal read leads to a missing person and a problem; how do I get her to bed?

Misplaced Slumber

Creeping
Over wood floors
Sliding in hissing socks
She awaits with glasses askew
Snoring

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Comments: 11

Dan B. Aug 6, 2006, 3:46pm EDT

Hey, this would be good for a movie leadin scene!

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Edward Nudelman Aug 6, 2006, 5:15pm EDT

Pefect Jim... reminds me of Alfred Hitchcock.

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Stephen McAllister Aug 6, 2006, 7:46pm EDT

Wonderful Jim. Paints a vivid picture.

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Carol Roach Aug 6, 2006, 7:47pm EDT

sliding in hissing socks, wow I can picture that now.

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Mandi -Watch where the chalk-white arrows go. To the place where the sidewalk ends. S.S. Aug 6, 2006, 7:54pm EDT

really good one

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Miz Lynn aka/BooBoo Aug 6, 2006, 8:04pm EDT

Vivid and colorful as usual!

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jessie voigts Aug 6, 2006, 8:52pm EDT

jim - you are so good at this. i got it, and that is incredible to me bc you use so few words! wow!!

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John F Walter Aug 7, 2006, 6:02am EDT

Great snap portrait of a somnambulist. Your use of action verbs to move the soporific figure about is first rate.
Shows your ability to compress and not waste words, Jim.

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