by Cat Givens
Member since:
November 16, 2005

Overcome (Mad Bees Two Word Challenge)

July 27, 2006 04:57 PM EDT
views: 42 | rating: 10/10 (12 votes) | comments: 18
You speak
I inhale your mouth...
supple lips moving,
your words I do not hear.

Your eyes
pools of wonder
I wish to dive in
as
you speak,

I do not hear
your words.

As in a dream
you smile
pearly teeth
tongue so tempting
I am deaf
save for a buzzing
like mad bees
drowning out
your voice,

I am smitten.
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Comments: 18

donna f. Jul 27, 2006, 5:25pm EDT
Cat, What a fabulous description of that first night passion. Wonderful!
Aileen F. Jul 27, 2006, 5:51pm EDT
First time I have thought of that buzzing with apleasant reaction!
Linda Douglas Jul 27, 2006, 6:04pm EDT
Very, very nice.
Clare Stella Jul 27, 2006, 6:12pm EDT
Truly smitten!
Edward Nudelman Jul 27, 2006, 6:20pm EDT
Great one.. I was so wondering how you'd get the bee thing in.. and done masterfully!
Kathryn E. Jul 27, 2006, 9:09pm EDT
Cat, your words: "I am deaf
save for a buzzing
like mad bees
drowning out
your voice," - Very descriptive, and perfect !!!
Cat Givens Jul 27, 2006, 10:08pm EDT
So, I see you've all been there..... He He!
Carol Roach Jul 27, 2006, 11:54pm EDT
truly wonderful
Cheryl W. Jul 28, 2006, 8:02am EDT
Wonderful take on the challenge. Loved it!
mona d. Jul 28, 2006, 8:19am EDT
beautiful and sensual...you are so good.
Marinela Kotsina Jul 28, 2006, 11:27am EDT
very, very beautiful, I love it
Spencer T. Jul 29, 2006, 5:20am EDT
Your talent
runs like honey
dripping pleasure
always sunny

Truly a Cat Givens write.
Barbary Chaapel Jul 29, 2006, 10:23pm EDT
Cat,

Great imagination for the challenge words.
Jim Ross Jul 31, 2006, 3:11pm EDT
Cat--I enjoyed the way you unfolded your "smitten-ness" and your use of "mad bees" to deaden your hearing. Good job.
Brandon S. Aug 6, 2006, 2:47pm EDT
You sound like a man...droning out your significant others words. What's wrong with you? lol
Cat Givens Aug 6, 2006, 9:04pm EDT
You all have bee here to understand the truth to this one!
Brandon, The blood sometimes only goes one place, and not the brain's hearing centre. He he

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