by Cat Givens
Member since:
November 16, 2005

Questions

July 17, 2006 02:42 PM UTC (Updated: July 17, 2006 03:55 PM UTC)
views: 0 | comments: 20
What if a feather lit upon my shoulder
sticking there
Joined by a hundred others,
Could I finally ride on air?

What if a tear from our Madonna
dropped into my eye
Would I be blessed and for all of humanity
I'd cry?

What if the vision of a shaman wafted
through my brain
Changing my view forever
Would you count me as insane?

What if a spark of fire flew up and
landed on my tongue
Would my new songs be different from
the old ones I have sung?

What if a lovely petal from a flower
brushed my toe
If wind brought more before my feet
Would sunshine make me grow?

What if I dance completely naked underneath
the sun
Would this come back to bite me, thus
My freedom come undone?

What if I choose to live each moment,
Turn my back on time
Step out of this "reality"
Would I find life sublime?

What if I just stop eating, will my body
decompose
As my spirit finds nirvana,
Would I suffer in repose?

What if I'm struck by lightening
Standing 'neath a rowan tree
Would this swift illumination
Come to be the death of me?


 

Comments: 20

Clare Stella Jul 17, 2006, 3:12pm UTC
Love the meter and the rhyme of this interesting poem.
Cheryl W. Jul 17, 2006, 3:43pm UTC
The "what if" questions are the ones that always drive me crazy. Good poem, Cat....
Cat Givens Jul 17, 2006, 4:03pm UTC
Since I don't care for the term "bite me", the two word challenge was an opportunity to explore a bit more. Glad you all approve!
As I fly above myself, watering with tears for all singing the shaman's song, I grow strong and naked in the sun spinning colors never seen with this new illumination.
Kerwin, you are so right.
Aileen F. Jul 17, 2006, 4:23pm UTC
Hey, I missed the bite me part until you mentioned it, LOL! I wasn't looking at the group headings. I enjoyed the magic in the dreaming here.
Leah Christensen Jul 17, 2006, 6:21pm UTC
loved this!
Carol Roach Jul 17, 2006, 6:48pm UTC
the most asked words in the universe, what if,
Barbary Chaapel Jul 17, 2006, 10:04pm UTC
Cat,

Those are some what if's to ponder. And I'm glad you used the challenge words in the way you did.
Carolyn Madden Jul 18, 2006, 4:31am UTC
Magnificent use of the 'bite me' challenge Cat. So lyrical and dreamy.
Cat, I just love this! You had a dream catcher and used it for this poem. Thus you also captured 10 rare stars from me.

Magi
Tony Close Jul 18, 2006, 5:01am UTC
Cat, this is wonderful! This goes way beyond deserving 10 stars - it deserves a bookmark to allow frequent revisits.
Many thanks for this.
mona d. Jul 18, 2006, 1:00pm UTC
wow, cat. i'm with tony, this one deserves multiple readings. so complex...it feels like it would make a wonderful song.
manoj sanyal Jul 18, 2006, 1:07pm UTC
Lovely with excellent rhyming!
d g. Jul 19, 2006, 12:03pm UTC
This was well written and fun.

All I could come up with for "bite me" was being held down and getting chomped on. Her response, "Well, if you don't want to get bitten, why do you keep coming back?"
Diana Raabe Jul 20, 2006, 10:06am UTC
Great questions asked in a very creative way here.
Enoch Allen Jul 22, 2006, 11:43am UTC
I second Diana's comment.
Nathan Schauer Jul 22, 2006, 3:10pm UTC
Excellent use of repitition. But I have to admit - my first thought was - what if you send me pictures of you dancing in the nude.
Cat Givens Jul 22, 2006, 4:00pm UTC
Glad you all liked this, it was a tough challenge to use the words in a satisfactory way, and I'm pleased with the result, as often I ask "what if?".... I ask a LOT of why and what if questions, and they help me with life.
dm, I agree with you!
And Nathan, you are inviting Trouble!
Cynthia M. Jul 24, 2006, 2:26am UTC
Wow!

Truly excellent poetry.

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