by gautami tripathy
Member since:
May 2, 2006

Back where he belonged!

May 29, 2006 08:28 AM EDT
views: 32 | rating: 7.5/10 (6 votes) | comments: 19

He was back five years after
Bringing back my lost laughter
Wrapped together all night long
Our feelings still very strong

Following a love filled night
I switched on the fluorescent light
Adrenaline flowing through my head
With my gun I shot him dead!


(c)gautami.tripathy 2005

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Comments: 19

John Doyle May 29, 2006, 8:30am EDT
i hope this is not autobiographical
Linda Douglas May 29, 2006, 8:39am EDT
The fine line between love and hate often becomes blurred. Nice piece.
Stephen Schneider May 29, 2006, 10:31am EDT
I bet you feel better
gautami tripathy May 29, 2006, 10:40am EDT
LOL! No John, it isn't!
gautami tripathy May 29, 2006, 10:42am EDT
Thanks Linda, I agree with you there.

Yes Stephen, I should feel better, shdn't I?

BTW, I wrote this for a writing exercise.
Cheryl W. May 29, 2006, 12:22pm EDT
Surprise ending.....love it!
La Lady Lisa Westerfield May 29, 2006, 1:20pm EDT
Wow!
MHN Paree May 29, 2006, 1:22pm EDT
the thin line betwixt love and hate breached!
good...
gautami tripathy May 29, 2006, 2:42pm EDT
Thanks Cheryl, Lisa and MHN for liking it.
gautami tripathy May 29, 2006, 2:43pm EDT
It seems someone rated it 1! It had a previous rating of 10 before this!

:(
David D. Gilbaugh May 29, 2006, 3:09pm EDT
Ratings Shmatings, they mean nothing when you are writing honestly and from the soul. Except mine - I like those tens. Doug
Alankrita P. May 29, 2006, 11:21pm EDT
I love this- am rating it 10
gautami tripathy May 30, 2006, 2:13am EDT
Oh I like those tens too, Doug! Deliberately getting down the ratings gets to me!


Thanks Alankrita! you dont have to do it!
Brandon S. May 30, 2006, 7:45pm EDT
sort of a black widow thing, huh. Good.
gautami tripathy May 31, 2006, 2:10am EDT
Thanks Brandon. But revenge is not always sweet.
Rene Edde May 31, 2006, 2:18am EDT
ENCORE! Not at all what I expected by the title of this piece, but oh have I felt that way soooooo many times! The repetitive cycle of lost laughter. And the bittersweet thoughts of those that do return. Sometimes people should know, for themselves, you should just stay away.

I love it. I am going to quote this, a few times..... Do you mind if I send this out in a few emails or so to some of my "girls"?
gautami tripathy May 31, 2006, 2:22am EDT
Rene, thanks! You can send it anyone you want to. I will be honoured, really!!
Johanna C. Jun 1, 2006, 11:35am EDT
what a surprise* powerful piece, thanks for sharing it
gautami tripathy Jun 1, 2006, 1:05pm EDT
thanks Johanna! LOL!

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