There are tons, and I mean tons, of haikus on Gather, and few of them are great. If you really wish to improve, I suggest you look up the term haiku, and see what the genre really is. There are a lot of fun pieces, that, while they fit the syllable pattern for haiku, are not really haikus in form. If you are just having fun, keep going, nothing wrong with that.
Nancy, actually I am just having fun, but at your suggestion, I did look it up and found more than I ever wanted to know about haiku here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku So maybe what I'm really writing is bad Senryu, not bad Haiku. ;-)
No they aren't terrible...you got the sequential part exactly....5-7-5, and you sure communicated how to be self-critical. So I say overall great job! And just take your time responding to the comment...I know a thing or two about procrastination my dear, LOL!
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There are a lot of fun pieces, that, while they fit the syllable pattern for haiku, are not really haikus in form.
If you are just having fun, keep going, nothing wrong with that.
Nancy, actually I am just having fun, but at your suggestion, I did look it up and found more than I ever wanted to know about haiku here:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku
So maybe what I'm really writing is bad Senryu, not bad Haiku. ;-)