by manoj sanyal
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May 5, 2006

Laughter beep

May 09, 2006 01:49 AM EDT (Updated: May 14, 2006 05:02 AM EDT)
views: 37 | rating: 10/10 (5 votes) | comments: 18

When I was born, I cried becoming nervous
every body was joyous.

In school, while I was punished with tremor
      friends had their canny humor.

Joined job, I was in perspiration
   the boss had his poker face transformation.

When I retire, I would shed tear

My wife would be in my all time presence fear.


Experience taught me the meaning of fun
Agony and sorrow of one may be other's pun.


When I die, many would weep

My heart would run with laughter beep.
 

 

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Comments: 18

Laura M. May 9, 2006, 2:08am EDT
These paired mirrors of reflection posing quite opposing views of th e same emotionalpose are effective and highlight the estrangement that ewe often feel when our emotions are exposed to witnessing "other" especially when pivotal choices will be made that will affect our lives. The final pairing of a joyful escape from it all still bears the tears from the former unseen and unshared feelings. This is poignant writing that self-deprecates with an unusual charm and mirrored rhyme and wry wisdom.. Welcome.I enjoyed my first reading of your work.
manoj sanyal May 9, 2006, 4:09am EDT
Thanks Laura for your appreciation of this satire.
Best wishes and have nice time.
manoj sanyal May 9, 2006, 6:00am EDT
Thanks Heather.
Perfection to some is imperfection to other .... generally.
Have nice time.
Christopher C. May 9, 2006, 9:25pm EDT
Manoj., I appreciate the "Laughter beep" title, having gone through Morse Code intercept school, at Ft. Devens, Massachusetts. The imagery is acute and playfully satirical. I like the tone because it's not perfect, again this adds to the satire. The little/major kick at the wife is something all can relate to. Great ending tying into the title. A deceptively simple poem, giving the reader much enjoyment, I did. Complexities of life hang onto the humor. Welcome to Gather. Thanks.
manoj sanyal May 10, 2006, 1:28am EDT
Thanks Christopher for the analysis.
Best wishes
Carol Voigts May 10, 2006, 10:21am EDT
This was delightful and put a smile on my face this morning. I liked the image of the being born.
manoj sanyal May 10, 2006, 1:30pm EDT
Thanks Carol.
Have nice time.
Aileen F. May 10, 2006, 5:47pm EDT
I enjoyed this!
Helen W. May 11, 2006, 1:15am EDT
Marvelous! This reminds me of the Hidden Words "I have made death a messenger of joy to thee. Wherefore dost thou grieve?"
manoj sanyal May 11, 2006, 1:18am EDT
Thanks Aleen.
Take care.
manoj sanyal May 11, 2006, 1:20am EDT
Thanks Helen for appreciation.
Yes dear, you are correct.
jessie voigts May 11, 2006, 11:05am EDT
these pairings of contrasting words made me smile. thanks!
Nathan Schauer May 11, 2006, 11:34pm EDT
the boss had his poker face transformation

This is an interesting line that makes me wonder about the relationship with the boss. The poem transforms from one stage to the next - so who is the poker faced boss? The poem seems to have a poker face about life. Are there more layers here than I imagine.
manoj sanyal May 12, 2006, 12:34am EDT
Thanks jesie.
Be on smiles... always.
manoj sanyal May 12, 2006, 12:36am EDT
Dear Nathan,
You caught me.
smiles....
lea and... c. May 19, 2006, 5:10pm EDT
The wise man observes, understands and smiles.
manoj sanyal May 23, 2006, 1:59am EDT
Thanks lec.
.... and the wisest feels...

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