Magical spring (Redondilla)

Fun and dance in magical spring

Bees hum and Robins sing in green

Wink stars and flowers bloom virgin

Joyous Nature and lovebirds swing.

Taste… Fun and dance, Bees hum

smell… flowers bloom virgin

sight.. magical spring

hearing… Robins sing in green

touch… lovebirds swing

Comments: 6

John F Walter May 8, 2006, 4:27pm EDT

Fascinating poetry object: half synaesthetic verse vision, half language lesson breakdown. A poem that offers its own palette, deconstructing itself to disarm the critic. manoj, you show us a unique open-ended verse that rejoices in being read in a linear fashion as well as up,down, diagonally; that has at its heart a sense of spring's enchantment, that enchants us in its originality.
Playing with conventions de-arranges our perceptions, and reorganizes our senses: As Rimbaud showed then, as you show now.

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manoj sanyal May 9, 2006, 12:00am EDT

Dear Walter,
I am overwhelmed and blushing.
Thanks dear.
Regards.

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Christopher C. May 9, 2006, 9:39pm EDT

John., I'm upside down. Manoj., Spring is laid open in the first stanza and the dance of spring takes place in the second stanza, as I read this poem. A bit of wordage jutabox forces the reader to grasp at the where about of storytelling form. Leaving the reader in the emotions of Spring. Thanks for sharing.

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