Sublime Abandon - Two word challenge

Words, subliminal messages

intelligence, freedom, WMDs

Verbiage with malice

planted, dropped, and taught

caught by faithful friends,

patrons of rote beliefs

heeders of borrowed direction

practiced in deception without reflection

Lessons and logic forsaken

shaded ethics judiciously excused

news calculated for friends

intent on orthodox ritual

Duality becomes custom

bottom dwellers rise and

despite the repulsive stench

their friends let them ride.

Blinders replace inquiry

wiretap and torture skate through,

wounds soon will fester

unless friends demand truth

Who forfeits power and freedom

with such sublime abandon

and why

Sandy Knauer

Comments: 21

Carol Voigts Mar 6, 2006, 4:17pm EST

"Despite the repulsive stench, their friends let them ride. " That is powerful, Sandy. Wel, actually the whole thing is powerful! Good job.

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Edward Nudelman Mar 6, 2006, 4:57pm EST

Sandy this was really cool. And it ended with a smash. Very nice.

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Done...cancelled...gather is not for ME Cancelled Mar 6, 2006, 5:17pm EST

Great spin/perspective, Sandy.

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Dawn Matley Maselli Mar 6, 2006, 5:34pm EST

blinders replace inquiry.....very poetic definition

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Aileen F. Mar 6, 2006, 6:53pm EST

What an interesting take on this!

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Stephen Schneider Mar 6, 2006, 7:38pm EST

Great job Sandy. The blinders will one day fall away.

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Sandy (Site Psychic™) Knauer Mar 6, 2006, 8:14pm EST

Thanks. Now I want to change a word. I don't know why I feel obligated to write the two-word challenge and shoot it out as soon as I see the topic. I want to change -- practiced in deception without reflection -- to practiced in acceptance without reflection.

Thanks for all the comments. I hope I live long enough to see those blinders fall away, Stephen. I do see them slipping a bit.

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Laura H. Mar 7, 2006, 3:03am EST

La la la la la la! I know who wishes Gore would have been elected!!

Excellent!

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Sandy (Site Psychic™) Knauer Mar 7, 2006, 3:39am EST

be still my heart ;-)

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Kathryn E. Mar 7, 2006, 4:03am EST

Sandy, this is excellent. I really like your take.

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0000-twobraincells-0000 Mar 7, 2006, 8:16am EST

nice twist Sandy

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X Tabber Mar 7, 2006, 1:54pm EST

Well said and well done!

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Aniko Mar 8, 2006, 2:17am EST

"Verbiage with malice

planted, dropped, and taught"

I like the weapon imagery (and all the rest others mentioned). Powerful.

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Sandy (Site Psychic™) Knauer Mar 8, 2006, 2:40am EST

;-) thanks, Aniko. I guess my war images weren't really so subliminal huh?

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Ian Thorpe Mar 8, 2006, 12:23pm EST

Up and at 'em Sandy, that's my girl
The pace of this is so infectious
Ian

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J. Johannes Mar 9, 2006, 10:46am EST

I liked this
"patrons of rote beliefs
heeders of borrowed direction"

how true and sad!

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Sandy (Site Psychic™) Knauer Mar 9, 2006, 3:33pm EST

Thanks, Ian and J. I agree, it is sad so many don't want to think for themselves.

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Julie L. Sep 9, 2006, 3:22pm EDT

Very well written Sandy. You are an amazing writer. The more of your work that I read the more convinced I am of this.

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Priscilla P. Oct 14, 2006, 8:14pm EDT

You said so poetically the degredation of society. It starts with the education system saying, "Here is the truth".

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Sandy (Site Psychic™) Knauer Oct 14, 2006, 8:49pm EDT

Priscilla, I had forgotten all about this. This was a two-word challenge excercise. Thanks for reading and commenting, and bringing me back to see this again.

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Shelbia C. Sep 19, 2008, 7:58pm EDT

I really like this.

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Sublime Abandon - Two word challenge

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