This is in response to David L's challenge to write something with the two words "Bottled Promise." Here is my attempt!
I have a bottled promise
I keep it tied inside
because if I let it out
I could no longer hide
I have a bottled promise
it keeps me linked with chain
though you cannot see them
the tethers still remain
I have a bottled promise
lies deep within my heart
dreams I once held dear
have slowly come apart
I have a bottled promise
will you set me free
wings only you can give me
if only you could see
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"Wow! That was fast. This is really good. Yikes. These women are all so much better than me!"
Well - Hell, it's the truth.
Monica - I'll echo Hannah's words. Tragic and beautiful. Being a man, my instincts are to go to your aid and hug you right now.
In-closing...I can see and you really don't need to hide anymore. I think you are also here with windows open and tells in your eyes. See:
http://www.gather.com/viewArticle.jsp?articleId=281474976726678
" have a bottled promise
lies deep within my heart
dreams I once held dear
have slowly come apart"
Fabuloso!
Eric - Thanks! That is the most powerfl and hurtful part of the poem. Perhaps one day the story behind the poem will come out. For now, I still have the chains.
After your "Wolf!" article about your lesbian lap top, I'm not so sure that some "trust" has not been lost. ;)
I don't know. Maybe after on-site, member2member email arrives.
Thanks Helen and Stephen!
Really a tragically beautiful poem.
...my favorite kind!
Whomever takes it on next can then pick the next person to follow them. And so on......Should be fun. Could ask for volunteers.
Now that most everyone has published something, I will be adding my version of "Bottled Promise" sometime tonight.
Again - Thank you for just being "you". How's your diet and exercise program going? Still rockin' it?